Scanned the thing and the sex scene didn't do it for me. Too wordy, too... I don't know, it made me smile but it didn't grab me. Maybe I'll give it another go if Aline wants the feedback from some French readers, but I don't see how mine would be constructive or anything. I mean, I only comment when I love what I read... when it didn't work - for reasons that have everything to do with me and nothing to do with the author's talent, obviously - I just don't say anything because what's the point *g* Of course what she posted was not a PWP so I could just go and read the rest properly when I'll have time - but fics in French... aren't my cup of tea, I'll admit *g*